Unit10 Connections 写作技巧点拨(解析版)

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Unit10 Connections写作技巧点拨
新闻报道
文体感知
本单元的写作任务是写一篇新闻报道。要写好一篇新闻报道，必须掌握新闻写作的语言特点：
1．具体。新闻用事实说话，五个W和一个H (When、Where、Who、What、Why和How)是构成一则完整报道不可缺少的要素， 这就需要记叙具体的时间、地点、人物、事情、因果、经过等。
2．准确。新闻语言不能含糊其词、模棱两可，也不能夸大或缩小事实。
3．简练。新闻语言要简明扼要、直截了当。
一般来说，一篇新闻报道应分为三个部分：
导语：简要介绍新闻背景，如时间、地点以及事件的基本情况等；
正文：具体报道活动的细节；
结尾：评价活动。
增分佳句
1．常用导语
(1)A terrible storm hit/struck the area.
一场可怕的风暴袭击了这个地区。
(2)It was a cool autumn night when the accident happened.　事故发生在一个凉爽的秋夜。
(3)A 4×100m relay race was held on the playground of our school last Sunday morning.
我们学校于上周日的上午在运动场举行了一场4×100米接力赛。
2．常用正文句
(1)It was a nice/fine day.
那天天气很好。
(2)40 players took part in the relay race, and most of them were students and teachers of Grade 1.
有40位运动员参加接力赛，他们大多是高一年级的学生和老师。
(3)All the students were in high spirits.
所有的学生都斗志昂扬。
(4)Finally, the student from Class 1 Grade 1 won the race.
最后，这位来自一年级一班的学生赢得了比赛。
(5)With the help of the rescue team, people who were trapped in the flood were saved.
在救援队的帮助下，被困在洪水中的人们得救了。
(6)Clearly/Obviously/In my opinion, it seemed that people were shocked.
显然/在我看来似乎人们震惊了。
(7)Because of/As a result of/Thanks to the help of the army, people who got injured were sent to the hospital immediately.
因为/幸亏有军队的帮助，受伤的人们被立即送往医院。
3．常用结尾句
(1)The activity is very meaningful.
这次活动非常有意义。
(2)It not only enriched our school life, but also strengthened our team spirit.
它不仅丰富了我们的学校生活，而且还增强了我们的团队精神。
(3)In a word/In conclusion, I believe we will build a new city.
总之，我相信我们将建设一个新城市。
满分作文特训
写作要求
假定你是某国际学校的校英语报的记者李华，最近你校组织留十个学生到敬老院陪老人们过重阳节。请按下列要点用英语写一篇新闻报道：
1.时间、地点；
2.活动内容：打扫卫生、表演节目；
3.同学们的体会。
参考词汇：敬老院(nursing home)；重阳节(the Double Ninth Festival)
注意：1.词数100左右；
2．可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。
审题谋篇
第一步： 审题构思很关键


第二步：补全句子雏形现
1．在重阳节这一天，十个留学生去拜访了敬老院。
On the Double Ninth Festival, ten foreign students visited__the__nursing__home．
2．这十个留学生在我们学校学习。
The ten foreign students are__studying__in__our__school．
3．他们早上八点乘车出发去敬老院，半小时后到达。
They set__out__for__the__nursing__home by bus at 8：00 am and arrived half an hour later.
4．一到达，他们就开始帮助老人们打扫房间。
On/Upon__arrival__they began to help the elderly clean their rooms.
5．他们做了很多事情，这些事情让老人们很快乐和温暖。
They did many things and the things made__the__elderly__happy__and__warm．
6．他们都觉得这次拜访是一次难忘的经历。
They all found__the__visit__an__unforgettable__experience．
7．通过这次经历，他们对这个节日有了更多的了解，同时也意识到老人需要得到尊重。
Through the experience they know more about the festival and realize__the__elderly__need__to__be__treated__with__respect．
第三步：句式升级造亮点
1．用定语从句合并第二步中的句1和句2
On__the__Double__Ninth__Festival,__ten__foreign__students__who__are__studying__in__our__school__visited__the__nursing__home.
2．用what引导的主语从句改写第二步中的句5
What__they__did__made__the__elderly__happy__and__warm.
3．用非限制性定语从句和“not only...but also...”结构合并第二步中的句6和句7
They__all__found__the__visit__an__unforgettable__experience,__through__which__they__not__only__know__more__about__the__festival__but__also__realize__the__elderly__need__to__be__treated__with__respect.
第四步：过渡衔接连成篇
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One possible version：
Foreign Students Spent the Double Ninth Festival
with the Elderly
On the Double Ninth Festival，ten foreign students who are studying in our school visited the nursing home.
They set out for the nursing home by bus at 8：00 am and arrived half an hour later. Upon arrival they began to help the elderly clean their rooms. Then, they spent some fun time together singing, dancing and playing games. What they did made the elderly happy and warm.
They all found the visit an unforgettable experience, through which they not only know more about the festival but also realize the elderly need to be treated with respect.
实战演练
假定你是李华，你于上周日参加了学校组织的社区志愿服务活动。请你为校英文报写一篇报道，内容包括：
1．活动内容；
2．活动反响。
注意：词数100左右。
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One possible version：
Our school held a volunteer activity to serve the community last Sunday. All the students in Grade One participated in the activity.
My class went to Qingyuan community at 9：00 am, where we were divided into five groups to care for the elderly and tell them some health knowledge. I was in group 4 whose assignment was to help the
elderly clean their windows. Besides, I also provided smartphone technical support to the elderly, which was welcomed by them.
By participating in such meaningful activities, not only are my interpersonal skills improved but I also  learn when we bring our love to the people in need, our life will be more significant.